Thursday, February 25, 2016

Week Six Storytelling: Calming Waters

Draupadi, Arjuna, Bhima, Nakula, and Sahadeva stood around the body of Yudhistira.  He laid peacefully in his royal robe with his arms on the sides of his body, and palms up facing towards the skies.  They checked his breathing regularly, but had not seen him move in over a week. They called upon sage Vyasa, but his only advice was to make sure that Yudhistira was not to be disturbed until he awakes. 

“What do you think he’s dreaming of?”

“I don’t know.  He’s been sleeping for days since we fought the war.”

“Someone nudge him.”

“No! Don’t do it!”

“Why?”

“If he’s meditating and we move his body, his spirit will roam.”

“Yudhistira …wake up…”

Calm waters and breezy winds swiftly touch my skin as I talk to god Yama, about the day that I met him.  I sit with my legs crisscrossed across from Yama as he changes his form from a crane to an old man who looks as if he’s seen the whole world.  Yama has become my guide for many things.  I often call upon him asking for advice.

This place is still as serene as I remembered.  Engulfed by the darken woods that surrounds it.  The waters still look indulging with their blue and purple hues.  I reminisce about seeing my brothers in their death.  Peacefully they laid, next to each other as if they were sleeping side by side like when we were young boys.  Many people have lost their lives to these waters, but to Yama he calls it sacrifice. 

“Yudhistira , do you know why I fill my ponds with tranquil waters that make people think they are the cure to all diseases and famine?”

“You want to test people of their worthiness, and see if they are of subservient character who displays selflessness and courage. Right? ”

“No. I make them this way because it reminds me of women.”

“What?”

“You’re wife Draupadi, wouldn’t you say that she is as beautiful as this landscape? She is breath taking, upstanding, and a woman who is not just defined by her looks right..?”

“Yes of course.”

“So looks can be deceiving?”

“Yes they can, and I feel as if this is child’s play Yama.”

“How so Yudhistira ?”

“You once told me the character of the Brahmins.  I disregarded the information you foretold me after I learned that Arjuna defeated Kripa, Bhishma, and Drona while Uttara drove the chariot.  This is unusual for any of our conversations.  Our conversations are intellectual, not on the basis of women and looks.”

“Yudhistira , your story begins with water, and it will end with water.  Our past does not define us, but it molds us into the people we are today.  Ganga was seen as a woman of beauty and stature by King Santanu, and without her beliefs of curses Bhishma would not have been the only son to survive.  Draupadi ia is a woman with five husbands.  When people look at her, they misjudge her, like these waters.  These waters have replenished you soul of thirst, and have allowed you to continue to live.  Ganga is a river goddess, but her water is lifted into the heavens and brought down to earth when it rains.  She replenishes us all, including the filling of these waters.”



Author’s Notes:  I enjoyed the characters Ganga, Yama, and Yudhistira the most from “The Mahabharata”.  I wanted to connect the characters together in my story, noting the tragedies that involved water in the epic.  Although, Ganga had not crossed paths with Yudhistira and Yama in the epic, I did however keep the story close to the epic.  In “The Mahabharata”, Ganga is seen in the beginning of the tale as a river goddess disguised as a woman who marries the king.  She kills seven of her sons after their birth because they are cursed to live as humans, and she wanted to end their misery. 


With the encounter of Yama, Yudhistira and his brothers were roaming the forest and are dying of thirst.  Each brother one by one encounters the water of Yama and are told not to drink the water.  Each brother disobeyed Yama and fell to their death after drinking from the pool.  When Yudhistira encounters a talking crane who is Yama in disguise, Yudhistira listens to the words of the crane acknowledging that the water is what sent his brothers to their death.  Because of his obedience and selflessness,  Yama gives Yudhistira's brother’s lives back to them. 

Bibliography: "The Mahabharata" written by R.K. Narayan (1978)

6 comments:

  1. Dijoun,
    I loved your story so much! In my opinion, descriptions and plenty of detail really set the stage for a story. Your descriptions about the colors, the water, and the characters were so beautiful. One of my favorite parts of your story was in a sentence towards the end that says, "Our past does not define us, but it molds us into the people we are today." I think this is great advice, not only for the characters in the epic, but for us readers as well!! Great job!

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  2. Dijoun,
    I loved your story so much! In my opinion, descriptions and plenty of detail really set the stage for a story. Your descriptions about the colors, the water, and the characters were so beautiful. One of my favorite parts of your story was in a sentence towards the end that says, "Our past does not define us, but it molds us into the people we are today." I think this is great advice, not only for the characters in the epic, but for us readers as well!! Great job!

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  3. Dijoun,

    I like how you gave an insight into what was going on in Yudhistira's head when he was meditating. I found it a little hard to follow the transition you made from the brothers talking about Yudhistira to what was going on in his head. Maybe you could put a sentence or two to distinguish that jump. Also, I noticed a few errors in the last paragraph. Overall, I liked this story. Great job!

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  4. We seem to have similar taste in characters and stories! I also wrote one story with Ganga, because she is so fascinating! And of course my most recent story was based on the riddles at the lake story. So overall I would say you have excellent taste. ;)
    I love the descriptions you used throughout this story. I felt very calm and serene while reading it, which shows what how powerful your wording was in conveying the tone!
    I was also a bit confused when we jumped from the brothers to Yudhishthira's meditation, so I agree that a sentence or two to distinguish those two components would be helpful.

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  5. Cool story. I really really loved how you switched from a third person perspective of Yudhistira's body to a first person perspective into his meditations with Yama. I also liked that the lesson took a very different turn than I was expecting, however I do wish that you had tied it together more coherently. It seems that there were many different points you were trying to make about women here, but there was no central focus.

    Lastly, I wish that Yudhistira had awoken from his meditation at the end, that way you could have tied the story together full circle and Yudhistira could have said something to Draupadi, thus showing the lesson that he learned.

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  6. Dijoun, this was a really interesting and entertaining story to read. I liked the different point of views you included in your story with the use of dialogue. It always helps me as a reader to get more in tune with a story and the character's personality. I also found your picture very fitting with your story. The setting was very clear for me as it often sometimes wasn't in the Mahabharata. Thanks for sharing.

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