Showing posts with label Week Five. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Week Five. Show all posts

Sunday, February 21, 2016

Thoughts about Comments

I have reviewed my comments from my introduction and storytelling. Overall the feedback that I receive from my classmates is very positive. We all have made this experience into a positive one in my opinion. I have received comments that provided constructive criticism and I do like when readers give me suggestions on things that I can improve on. I want my readers to be engaged in the stories that I write and understand what I am conveying. Reading comments prepares me for the next post that I write, and makes me review my work thoroughly before posting. Sometimes, I often find myself going back to re-read my posts days later to make sure that my stories flow and make sense.


I have responded back to some of my comments that have been posted on my page. I’m trying to figure out a day or time where I can set aside to comment back to everyone. So far my replies back have not been in a respectable timely manner, but I’m working on it.

Friday, February 19, 2016

Week Five Storytelling: Yudhistira

"Why is there blood everywhere?" Yudhistira thought.

Yudhistira ran to the river trying to rinse his bloody hands.  The more he washed them, it seemed like more blood reappeared.  He looked down to see his reflection, but only saw the moon with a red tint.  Scared that the gods were showing him a sign, he looked up to the sky and saw that the moon was still white. Yudhistira looked at his clothing and jumped inside of the river believing that it would cleanse his whole body.



“It won't come off!” he shouted in his mind.

Frantic and panicking while dousing his face with water, he stopped.  He heard heavy breathing and the crackling sound of leaves near him. Wiping his eyes, Yudhistira turned around looking to see if there was anyone behind him. Bringing his hands together underneath the water gently and quietly, Yudhistira collected water in his palms to cleanse his face.

“You have awakened me, Yudhistira.” It was a voice of a woman.

“Who’s there?”

“Why worry who I am when it is you who wants me to wash away you bloody hands?  Do you want to know why the blood remains on your clothing?”

Yudhistira slowly walked near the shore of the river and was stopped before he could step out.  Wondering what was tugging on the back of pants, he turned and saw the woman standing behind him.

“I’ve watched you since you were a little boy, and I often wondered when you would come back.  It has been years since you last bathed in my waters. Your brothers, your cousins…”

“Who are you?”

“Why ask me who I am, when you can tell me why you have blood on your body?”

“I know nothing of what you speak, and I ask for you to let me go.”

The woman walked away from Yudhistira and began to submerge half of her body beneath the water.  She bent her back fluidly and began to float. As she hummed a song that he once heard his mother sing, Yudhistira became enchanted by the woman’s hymns.  She was beautiful he thought.  She was mysterious in a weird and creepy way, but beautiful nonetheless.

“Who are you?”

“Answer my question first,” the woman said while floating past Yudhistira.

“I was in trouble.  My brothers and cousins have fought since we were children.  My brothers and I believed that it was innocent play until we became older.  It was always a competition between us, and then we were sentenced to exile.  My addiction to gambling was exposed in front of everyone in Hastinapura. I wanted to confront my uncle Dhritarashtra, so I sneaked away from my brothers and wife and left for Hasptinapura.  When I went into the palace, I saw who I believed to be my uncle walking in his room. When I tried to confront him, it turned out not to be him.  Duryodhana, my cousin was dressed in my uncle’s evening robe and there was blood everywhere on the marble floor.  When I questioned Duryodhana we started to tussle and I rolled in the blood.  The palace guards heard our struggles, and Duryodhana screamed as if I stabbed him and I ran off.”


“Yudhistira, Duryodhana planned the death of his father when he was a child. He will harm himself and blame you for it.  Go back into exile and serve your sentence.  You must not speak of this to anyone including your brothers.  We will meet again.”


Author's Note: This story was inspired by the epic tale, “The Mahabharata.”  In the beginning of the epic, a backstory is told involving the river goddess Ganga and King Santanu.  Ganga drowns seven of  her children, and when confronted by King Santanu, she frees their eight son, Bhishma who plays a large part in the tale.  When Bhishma is older, he takes on a vow of celibacy and helps his father's second wife find a woman to help bear children in order to take King Santanu's place on the throne.  In later years, there is a division that is seen in the family. Competitions become a way of life between the Pandavas and the Kauravas.  Throughout their childhood and adulthood, jealousy and hatred brews amongst the Kaurava brothers towards their cousins the Pandavas.

In my version of the story, I wanted to highlight the character Yudhistira who is a Pandava.  Yudhistira displays some of the qualities that the character Rama did in “The Ramayana.”  Yudhistira is confident, complex, and obedient.  Although he is a character that is many admire, his flaws are never brought to attention by those who are close to him.  Moreover in Yudhistira's case, his cousin Duryodhana uses his weakness of gambling in order to gain his kingdom and to place Yudhistira and his brothers into exile.  I wanted Yudhistira to speak up for himself and talk to his uncle who is a fickle character that wants to please son Duryodhana. Duryodhana's depravity is expressed throughout the story, and I wanted to show a side of him that seems to be true to his character.  Although he did not kill his father in the original tale, I thought it would be great to a twist. 

Bibliography: "The Mahabharata" written by R.K. Narayan (1978)

Thursday, February 18, 2016

Week Five Reading Diary Continued: The Mahabharata, R.K. Narayan

In part B of the reading "The Mahabharata", I noticed the jealousy that has risen in Duryodhana, eldest son of King Dhritarashtra.  When invited to Indraprastha, the kingdom where his cousins rule, Dhritarashtra complains to his uncle Sakuni about his visit on his way home.  He admits that his cousins are well off and that they have made a beautiful kingdom out of a desert.  The kingdom is now looked at as the most fascinating and advance kingdom in comparison to Hastinapura.  His cousins, have found favor in the eyes of their residents, and are treated with much respect.  They honor the residents of the kingdom more so than those who live in Hastinapura by giving them gifts and treating them with high admiration.


Dhritarashtra feels that his cousins went out of their way to make him feel uncomfortable throughout his visit in the City of Splendor.  He recalls them laughing at him every chance they received.  When he arrived at their great hall of marble, he was unable to distinguish what was what.  He was often confused as to whether he was walking on high polished marble floors, or in water.  He mentions the painting on the wall looking realistic to the point where he tries to grab the rose from the painting. When Dhritarashtra arrives home, he immediately tells his father King Duryodhana about the trip.   Sakuni talks to Duryodhana, and Duryodhana ignores Sakuni’s comments about his son’s jealousy.  In order to please his son, Duryidhana builds a great hall of his own in order to over shadow his nephews.

When Duryodhana’s great hall is completed, he invites his nephews to visit.  It is then when I believe that Dhritarashtra came up with the plan of enticing his cousin Yudhistira to a game of dice, resulting Yudhistira to bringing himself and his family in debt and a life of solitude.  Yudhistira, his brothers, and their wife are sentenced to live in exile for a period of thirteen years, and during this time Dhritarashtra concocts a plan to attacking his cousins so he and his brothers can take over their cousin’s land that their father granted them.



Bibliography: "The Mahabharata" written by R.K. Narayan (1978)

Wednesday, February 17, 2016

Week Five Reading Diary: The Mahabharata, R.K. Narayan

The Mahabharata is an epic take that takes place in ancient India.  In the beginning of the story we are introduced to the characters Santanu and Ganga.  Santanu is the King of Hastinapura, and one day he takes a walk by a river, and sees Ganga who is enchanting. King Santanu quickly asks Ganga for her hand in marriage, but Ganga tells him that she will only do so if certain conditions are met.  Ganga tells King Santanu the only way she will marry him, is if he promises not to question her actions.  Upon agreeing to this, Ganga and Sanantu marry and move into the palace.  Years pass and Ganga bears children, all boys.  Each time Ganga delivers a child, she takes the child to the river where her and Santanu met and she drowns them.  Over a period of time, Ganga drowned seven of their sons.  When she became pregnant again, she delivered the child and took him to the river.  Not understanding his wife’s actions, Santanu questioned Ganga.  Ganga told Santanu that she is the river goddess, and each child she bore was cursed to live a life in human form; because of this, she ended their punishment. Since Santanu questioned Ganga's actions before drowning their eight child Devarata, Devarata will live and Ganga will spend her lasting days at the river. 



In later chapters, King Santanu marries again and promises the throne to his second wife's children.  Obeying his father's wishes, Devarata does not challenge his father nor his stepmother Satyavathi.  Devarata receives the name Bhishma due to him vowing not to marry and have any children in respect towards his father's wishes, and is then blessed by the God's for taking and upholding his vow. When Bhishma's half brother dies, his stepmother calls upon her first son Vyasa who is a poet,  to bear children that will take Santanu’s place on the throne.  When Vyasa fathers children with the princesses that Bhishma finds him, he places curses on the children based on their mother’s behaviors during their interaction.  



Bibliography: The Mahabharata written by R.K. Narayan (1978)